Said the copywriter who wrote this for the Beverly Hills Hotel home page:
“Many of our bungalows have interesting histories as well: Elizabeth Taylor honeymooned with six of her eight husbands, Marilyn Monroe and Marlene Dietrich, among others, enjoyed them as well.”
Unclear pronoun reference, improper punctuation, confusing repetition — it’s almost everything you could ask for in bad writing.
Good example. On the first read through I was thinking why would liz honeymoon at the same place so many times….and wow, those were some lucky guys! 🙂
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That is so rich… Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for sharing–hiring an editor is so important! — it makes you look like you know what you’re doing as an author!
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Alice Osborn,
I know my works wouldn’t be half as good without the insights of my beta readers and editors.
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Great example Mike…thanks for sharing…
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