I Don’t Need An Editor!

Said the copywriter who wrote this for the Beverly Hills Hotel home page:

“Many of our bungalows have interesting histories as well: Elizabeth Taylor honeymooned with six of her eight husbands, Marilyn Monroe and Marlene Dietrich, among others, enjoyed them as well.”

Unclear pronoun reference, improper punctuation, confusing repetition — it’s almost everything you could ask for in bad writing.

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5 thoughts on “I Don’t Need An Editor!”

  1. Good example. On the first read through I was thinking why would liz honeymoon at the same place so many times….and wow, those were some lucky guys! 🙂

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